Writing in Role - Akshave Arulparan
Pip is only seven years old, why does she understand that? She needs to go a little easy on him. She treats him like an orphaned child that she is being forced to raise. Although she is his sister, she should be taking care if him as if he was her child. Our child. I love her. We have been married for many years, She works hard. She does take care of the house and all. Pip is a very polite and a meek child. Pip himself is much more different then the other kids his age. I know Pip isn't my child, but he's become apart of my life since the day he was born. I See him as not just a little boy but my little boy. I hope he understands I’m always there for him. Today I saw the most unusual thing Pip has done. He was stealing food from his sister pantry. I didn't understand why, he is not the type who steals. I saw him leave the house. I silently followed him. I don't understand why we taking all this. I just don’t understand. As I go behind him silently, he goes into the Marshes. He gives everything he stole this man. Im sure I have never met this man before, he has a iron leg. He seems like a convict; escaped convict. Why would Pip be stealing food to give to a convict? I need to confront Pip about this.
I think you did a good job on analyzing Joe since it is clear from what you are saying would be something that Joe would feel. The part about your writing that you may want to fix though is that Joe never found out that Pip had stolen food for the convict and he didn't know about Pip helping the man to remove the chains on his legs in the first place. Also you may want to mention the name of who you are writing about just to be more clear even if the thoughts and evidence you say hint to a specific character. You also did a good job on saying how Joe feels toward the other characters in the book like Pip and Ms. Joe which shows emotion in your writing in role.
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